Thank you Furai. I've written it up and I'm ready for my 3rd Quality Control check.[Overview] is the first one, then before each set you type
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Thank you Furai. I've written it up and I'm ready for my 3rd Quality Control check.[Overview] is the first one, then before each set you type
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To outrun Rayquaza and Kyurem-W, you need 168 EVs with a neutral nature, you only need 56 Speed EVs with a Timid nature.He can dump some EVs into the defenses of both variants, but to outspend Rayquaza and Kyurem-W, you need 168 EVs, and 176 for Lati@s.
that was to shrang lolRight now I want to thank you for helping me with this. I'm new here, so you've been a really big help, pointing out a fucking shit ton of stuff I would normally miss. Thank you in advance for getting this on Smogon. I've made all of the changes.
You're points seem like they contradict what you're trying to get across imo. If Arceus is Spikes bait, then wouldn't you want to switch in a Magic Bounce user?I would say mentioning Magic Bouncers as team-mates is fairly redundant as Arceus-Steel is the opposite of a good partner to them, i.e. He can't threaten entry haxard users at all, making it significantly harder for Espeon/Xatu to do their job. Spinners are cool though, since this set is spike bait as hell- although Arceus-Steel itself doesn't need them much to perform its job. All spinners are really bad against sun, and so is this Arceus set. Maybe a mention of how this set being spikes bait and solving that by adding a spinner might makes your team weaker to sun?
That first sentence is an insult. English is my first language. I don't feel I'm qualified for this. You can continue this thread if you would like.Just a quick note, I understand that English isn't your first language but you really should try to proofread before GP. I'm not trying to be mean but it's really hard to read what you wrote and I imagine the GP team won't be very eager to check it themselves.
Anyways, on to the nitpicking:
Remove the mention of Groudon in the second sentence, it has EQ and Drought so Kyogre's Drizzle isn't helping you.
Remove the mention of Groudon as setup bait. There isn't much point in saying it sets up on Steelarc just to say it actually doesn't in the next sentence.
You should probably go ahead and merge the whole setup bait bit into the section on teammates. That way you can point out it's weaknesses and follow up with potential partners to deal with them.
I kinda want to see a sentence along the lines of "As the EV spread for Arceus-Steel can easily be changed to suit one's needs.." before the alternate EV spread options to really make it clear that Arceus is incredibly flexible.
Sorry, I don't understand what "Frail sweepers are good as well, as they have a revenge killer checked and taken care of. Mewtwo is a good example." is supposed to mean. Could you explain it to me?
In general I feel like you talk about what Steelarc's moves do and what partners you should run with it but not much about what the set itself is meant to accomplish. (besides being a support set) Can you include a short bit about what the set is designed to do and why one would want to use it over another support Steel type like Jirachi or Ferrothorn?
I've applied all these changes, however I've made some changes of my own.Just a quick note, I understand that English isn't your first language but you really should try to proofread before GP. I'm not trying to be mean but it's really hard to read what you wrote and I imagine the GP team won't be very eager to check it themselves.
Anyways, on to the nitpicking:
Remove the mention of Groudon in the second sentence, it has EQ and Drought so Kyogre's Drizzle isn't helping you.
Remove the mention of Groudon as setup bait. There isn't much point in saying it sets up on Steelarc just to say it actually doesn't in the next sentence.
You should probably go ahead and merge the whole setup bait bit into the section on teammates. That way you can point out it's weaknesses and follow up with potential partners to deal with them.
I kinda want to see a sentence along the lines of "As the EV spread for Arceus-Steel can easily be changed to suit one's needs.." before the alternate EV spread options to really make it clear that Arceus is incredibly flexible.
Sorry, I don't understand what "Frail sweepers are good as well, as they have a revenge killer checked and taken care of. Mewtwo is a good example." is supposed to mean. Could you explain it to me?
In general I feel like you talk about what Steelarc's moves do and what partners you should run with it but not much about what the set itself is meant to accomplish. (besides being a support set) Can you include a short bit about what the set is designed to do and why one would want to use it over another support Steel type like Jirachi or Ferrothorn?
It's fine for the analysis to be tl;dr if it isn't fluff or repetition, and this analysis tends to have a bit of the latter, however, it can get fixed in the copyediting stage. Speaking of which, the copyediting stage is when the GP team (and amateur checkers) come in and make grammatical changes to your analysis. After doing so, they will stamp your analysis (much like QC) to indicate that they're done and that you should implement their changes. Once you get two GP checks (maybe more, if GP thinks it's necessary), you will have your analysis completed and ready to go on-site. More info about the GP team can be found here: http://www.smogon.com/forums/threads/grammar-prose-team-queue-2-grammatic-boogaloo.3471267/ (sorry for the sloppy link, I'm on my tablet and it isn't letting me hyperlink :[)Oh yes, I had a question I forgot to post: With all of my new content in here, does anyone think this is a bit of tl:dr?
EDIT: Aaaaaaaaaand another one: What does the tag Copyediting mean?
No problem, it's good to ask questions, however, to keep the thread uncluttered, you should just VM me or another member your questions instead of posting them here.Thanks Rohail! I'm just full of questions, huh? Two more questions, just because I'm new! :D
1. What is a hyperlink, and how do I use it? (This is probably going to get me a tag that says noob)
2. Do I have to do anything else once I get my final GP check?
Changes made.Two other attacks worth mentioning in AC are Stone Edge and Magic Coat. Stone Edge is good for nailing all the Ho-Oh that love to switch into Steel Arceus while Magic Coat removes that weakness to Spike setters and can even anti lead Deo S. (252 Atk Deoxys-S Fire Punch vs. 248 HP / 0 Def Arceus-Steel: 112-134 (25.28 - 30.24%) -- guaranteed 4HKO)