i know this is not the most appropriate comment to make when you have already submitted your essay, but as cautionary advice for others i feel obliged to say that your common application essay is awful, trite and highly immature. i'm not trying to mount a personal attack; i've flopped badly at these sorts of things as well and with guidance i found it easy to fix up my mistakes.
this probably belongs to the college acceptance thread, but the post was made here so...
for one, the beginning is honestly obnoxious, unprofessional, and kind of insulting to the admissions faculty. don't be patronizing and tell them "what they're supposed to do"... they know and they also understand that it's a difficult task especially given how forced these things tend to be--pointing it out is not a good strategy in this instance. they're willing to be sympathetic given these constraints but your opener basically craps over that goodwill. you're basically implying that this whole personal essay thing is total bullshit, especially when you quote "changed me" like an "edgy tween". so if you think the whole thing is bullshit, then why the fuck would i care about your essay? remember, tone is key and the tone of your essay is god awful. im sorry but this needs to be said.
and for the love of god do not bring up pokemon... it makes you seem extremely immature. admissions want to see your personality come across and some idiosyncrasies are perfectly acceptable but you only have so many words and you want to emphasize adulthood. remember, the people reading this are not doing cosplay, they are grown-ups and they are not interested in fuckin' pokemon.
listen, im not saying you wont get into college, nor am i saying that you wont get into a good college: from what i recall you have good grades, ECs, a strong SAT score and you're probably a pretty good kid but you will get in despite your common application essay, yet you want your essay to be an advantage as you want any advantage you can get.