OU [SS] Choice Band Weavile [DONE]

[ImZer0]

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Triple Axel
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Low Kick / Beat Up
item: Choice Band
ability: Pressure
nature: Jolly / Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Description
=========

Choice Band Weavile is a powerful wallbreaker that can punch holes in teams with its strong STAB moves and high Speed. Ice Shard is good at picking off faster foes such as Dragapult, as well as boosted Garchomp and Dragonite, and it can also outprioritize Rillaboom's Grassy Glide. Triple Axel is insanely strong when backed by Choice Band, 2HKOing Clefable, as well as 2HKOing defensive Buzzwole after Stealth Rock. Knock Off lets Weavile remove items from its checks early-game such as Rocky Helmet from Buzzwole, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Corviknight or Leftovers from Melmetal and Tapu Fini. Low Kick allows Weavile to hit Steel-types like Ferrothorn, Melmetal, and Heatran for super effective damage. Another option is Beat Up, which, when paired with strong physical attackers is an immensely strong, no-contact STAB move that allows it to muscle through many targets early-game such as Toxapex and Corviknight. A Jolly nature is used to allow Weavile to be as fast as possible, letting it outspeed Tornadus-T and Speed tie Modest Dragapult. However, an Adamant nature can be used to maximize its damage output, most notably guaranteeing a 2HKO on Ferrothorn and defensive Buzzwole with Low Kick and Triple Axel, respectively.

Team Options
========

Since Choice Band Weavile is vulnerable to entry hazards, Defog users such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent teammates. All of these can also U-turn to bring Weavile in safely, with Landorus-T additionally being able to check Heatran for Weavile. Future Sight support from Tapu Lele, Galarian Slowking, Slowbro, and Slowking are greatly appreciated, since they can help Weavile break through common checks such as Toxapex, Tapu Fini, and Buzzwole. Slowbro and Slowking in particular can bring Weavile safely onto the field with Teleport and can also check Urshifu-R and Heatran, respectively. Physical attackers such as Garchomp, Kartana, Melmetal, Rillaboom, and Urshifu-R are all excellent partners, as they all boost the power of Beat Up and overwhelm checks such as Buzzwole and Corviknight, Rillaboom in particular pairs well with Weavile, luring in Flying-types such as Zapdos and Tornadus-T while also softening defensive cores with Knock Off, it also threatens Urshifu-R and Tapu Fini for Weavile. Heatran is a superb partner, as it can scare out some of Weavile's checks like Melmetal, Volcarona, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele. Other Steel-types such as Ferrothorn and Melmetal can also help check Clefable and Tapu Lele for Weavile. Ferrothorn can also set up Spikes for Weavile to take advantage of while Melmetal can lure in Pokemon like Slowbro and Zapdos for Weavile to exploit. Garchomp is a great partner, as it can force out common checks to Weavile such as Toxapex and Heatran, while Weavile can help Garchomp by threatening Slowbro and Landorus-T. Urshifu-R also pairs well with Weavile, appreciating the fact that Weavile can force out Slowbro, Dragonite, and Zapdos, while Urshifu-R can offensively check Blaziken, Melmetal, and Heatran.

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This is a pretty good start. Most of my comments are "try to go more in depth here" or "make some ideas easier to read" but content seems good. Please tag me after implemented so I can give it another look.

ImZer0, post: 9991741, member: 629771

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Triple Axel
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Low Kick / Beat Up
item: Choice Band
ability: Pressure
nature: Jolly / Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Description
=========

Choice Band Weavile is a powerful immediate Wallbreaker that can punch huge holes in teams by virtue of its extremely (dont oversell it) strong STAB moves and high Speed. Ice Shard is good at picking off many faster Ice weak Threats foes such as Dragapult, +1 Garchomp and +1 Dragonite, and can also outprioritize Rillaboom's Grassy Glide. Triple Axel is insanely strong when backed by Choice Band, 2HKOing even Clefable and having good odd's to 2HKO Defensive Buzzwole, (you 2HKO it after Stealth Rock, so mentioning that instead works) however Icicle Crash, while weaker can be run for a more reliable accurate ice stab, it also allows Weavile to bypass contact effects, (mention examples) Knock Off is a incredibly spammable stab that lets Weavile remove items and softens up many defensive Pokemon earlier on. (Mention some particular examples like Buzzwole's, Clefable's, and Corviknight's Rocky Helmet, and Melmetal's, Ferrothorn's, and Tapu Fini's Leftovers) Low Kick is mainly used in the fourth moveslot to allow allows Weavile to hit Steel types like Ferrothorn, Melmetal, and Heatran, 2HKOing the former two while OHKOing the latter, another option is Beat Up which when paired with hard physical attackers at fully power is a immensely strong, no contact stab move that allows it to power through many targets early game such as Toxapex and Rocky Helmet Corviknight. a Jolly nature is used to allow Weavile to be as fast as possible, letting it outspeed Tornadus-T and speed tie Modest Dragapult however an Adamant nature can be used to maximize its damage output, most notably guaranteeing a 2HKO on Ferrothorn and Defensive Buzzwole with Low Kick and Triple Axel respectably.

This is good. In general though it could be good to separate your ideas a bit more with periods so they are easier to read. Between the Low Kick and Beat Up descriptions for example, you could use a period to separate their descriptions.

Team Options
========

Since Choice Band Weavile is vulnerable to entry hazards this makes Defoggers Defog users excellent teammates. Common Defoggers such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent partners and they can use U-turn to bring Weavile in safely, the latter can also check Heatran for Weavile. (Try to rework this sentence with the first one, since its pretty much the same idea) Future Sight support from Tapu Lele, Galarian Slowking, Slowbro, and Slowking make for excellent partners as well since they can help Weavile break through common checks such as Toxapex, Tapu Fini, and Buzzwole, the latter 2 in particular can also pivot Weavile in off of their safe Teleports and can also check Heatran and Urshifu-R. (This idea is good but it isnt clear who you are talking about. Being more specific would help) Many Physical Attackers such as Garchomp, Kartana, Dragonite, Melmetal, Rillaboom, Urshifu-R, and Swords Dance Landorus-T are all excellent partners as they all boost the power of Beat Up and overwhelm each others checks, (This is good but taking it slowly would be nice, and being more specific in the same way you are with Rillaboom. For example Urshifu-R can help Weavile overwhelm Tapu Fini) Rillaboom in particular pairs excellent with Weavile, luring in Flying types such as Zapdos and Tornadus-T to get Weavile in with U-turn while also beating down on each others checks such as Urshifu-R and Tornadus-T as well as softening up defensive cores with Knock Off for its teammates to abuse. (Remember to be more specific. Here it reads like Urshifu-R is a Rillaboom check. Try a new sentence that says "in turn, Rillaboom can threaten Urshifu-R and Tapu Fini) Heatran is a superb partner as it can scare out some of Weavile's checks like Melmetal, Volcarona, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele, (This is pretty good but you can add a bit more. For example Ferrothorn and Melmetal both help a ton vs Choice Scarf Tapu Lele) while also luring in bulky Water Types to trap and eliminate. (This I dont like very much cause Weavile already deals with Slowbro, and saying you outright use Heatran to take on Fini, while it can work in practice, it can be an odd mention for new readers)

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QC 1/2 after implemented. Made a bigger comment on Garchomp and Urshifu-R as partners towards the end, make sure to check it out please. Ty!

ImZer0, post: 9991741, member: 629771

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Triple Axel
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Low Kick / Beat Up
item: Choice Band
ability: Pressure
nature: Jolly / Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Description
=========

Choice Band Weavile is a powerful immediate Wallbreaker that can punch huge holes in teams by virtue of its strong STAB moves and high Speed. Ice Shard is good at picking off faster Ice weak foes such as Dragapult, +1 Garchomp, and +1 Dragonite, and can also outprioritize Rillaboom's Grassy Glide. Triple Axel is insanely strong when backed by Choice Band, 2HKOing even Clefable and having good odd's to 2HKO Defensive Buzzwole after Stealth Rock, however Icicle Crash, while weaker can be run for a more accurate Ice STAB, it also allows Weavile to bypass contact effects. (Mention said contact effects. Like Zapdos's Static, Ferrothorn¿s Iron Barns, and Rocky Helmet from Corviknight, Buzzwole, and Clefable) Knock Off lets Weavile remove items and soften up many defensive Pokemon earlier on such as Buzzwole's, Clefable's, and Corviknight's Rocky Helmet and Melmetal's, Ferrothorn's, and Tapu Fini's Leftovers. Low Kick allows Weavile to hit Steel types like Ferrothorn, Melmetal, and Heatran, 2HKOing the former two while OHKOing the latter. Another option is Beat Up which when paired with hard physical attackers at fully power is a immensely strong, no-contact stab move that allows it to power through many targets early game such as Toxapex and Rocky Helmet Corviknight. a Jolly nature is used to allow Weavile to be as fast as possible, letting it outspeed Tornadus-T and speed tie Modest Dragapult however an Adamant nature can be used to maximize its damage output, most notably guaranteeing a 2HKO on Ferrothorn and Defensive Buzzwole with Low Kick and Triple Axel respectably.

Team Options
========

Since Choice Band Weavile is vulnerable to entry hazards this makes Defog users excellent teammates. Common Defog users such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent partners and they can use U-turn to bring Weavile in safely, the latter can also check Heatran for Weavile. Future Sight support from Tapu Lele, Galarian Slowking, Slowbro, and Slowking make for excellent partners as well since they can help Weavile break through common checks such as Toxapex, Tapu Fini, and Buzzwole. Slowbro and Slowking in particular can also pivot Weavile in off of their safe Teleports and can also check Heatran and Urshifu-R. Physical Attackers such as Garchomp, Kartana, Melmetal, Rillaboom, and Urshifu-R are all excellent partners as they all boost the power of Beat Up and overwhelm checks such as Tapu Fini and Heatran, Rillaboom in particular pairs excellent with Weavile, luring in Flying such as Zapdos and Tornadus-T to get Weavile in with U-turn (I dont think you have to mention this part specifically) while also softening up defensive cores with Knock Off, in turn, Rillaboom can threaten Urshifu-R and Tapu Fini for Weavile. Heatran is a superb partner as it can scare out some of Weavile's checks like Melmetal, Volcarona, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele. Other Steel types such as Ferrothorn and Melmetal can also help check Clefable and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele for Weavile as well.

You can make particular emphasis on two more Pokemon at least. You dont have to mention the following word for word (in fact, dont) but think they are important partners that need mention.

- Garchomp can help with Zeraora, Melmetal, Heatran, and Toxapex, while in turn Weavile can help it against Landorus-T and Slowbro. They can also work together to wear down common checks such as Buzzwole and Corviknight.
- Urshifu-R appreciates Weavile taking on Zapdos, Dragonite, and Slowbro, while in turn it can help against Ferrothorn, Heatran, Melmetal, and Blaziken. They can also work together to wear down the likes of Tapu Fini and Buzzwole.

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[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Triple Axel
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Low Kick / Beat Up
item: Choice Band
ability: Pressure
nature: Jolly / Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Description
=========

Choice Band Weavile is a powerful immediate Wallbreaker (powerful wallbreaker will do, terms like wallbreaker do not need to be capitalised according to Spelling and Grammar Standards) that can punch huge holes in teams by virtue of with its strong STAB moves and high Speed. Ice Shard is good at picking off faster Ice weak (Ice Shard is powerful enough with a Choice Band boost that it can pick off Pokemon that are neutral to Ice) foes such as Dragapult, +1 Garchomp, and +1 Dragonite (something like 'Dragapult as well as boosted Garchomp and Dragonite' works better because Ice Shard can still revenge kill both at +6 as long as Dragonite is not running Extreme Speed), and can also outprioritize Rillaboom's Grassy Glide. Triple Axel is insanely strong when backed by Choice Band, 2HKOing even Clefable as well as 2HKOing Defensive Buzzwole after Stealth Rock,. however Icicle Crash, while weaker can be run for a more accurate Ice STAB despite, it also allows Weavile to bypass contact effects like Zapdos's Static, Ferrothorn's Iron Barbs, and Rocky Helmet from Corviknight, Buzzwole, and Clefable. (you can omit this, Icicle Crash should be mentioned in other options as there is a huge power drop-off in exchange for a move that is still inaccurate) Knock Off lets Weavile remove items and soften up many defensive Pokemon its checks earlier on such as Buzzwole's, Clefable's, and Corviknight's Rocky Helmet and Melmetal's, Ferrothorn's, and Tapu Fini's Leftovers Rocky Helmet from Buzzwole, Clefable, Ferrothorn and Corviknight as well as Leftovers from Melmetal and Tapu Fini. (Ferrothorn also runs Rocky Helmet quite often, so I moved it to the former) Low Kick allows Weavile to hit Steel-types like Ferrothorn, Melmetal, and Heatran, 2HKOing the former two while OHKOing the latter. (I would probably focus on how Low Kick hits those Steel-types for super-effective damage instead as Heatran can be physically defensive and survive a Low Kick) Another option is Beat Up, which when paired with hard strong physical attackers at fully power is an immensely strong, no-contact stab move that allows it to power muscle through many targets early-game such as Toxapex and Corviknight. a A Jolly nature is used to allow Weavile to be as fast as possible, letting it outspeed Tornadus-T and speed tie Modest Dragapult. hHowever, an Adamant nature can be used to maximize its damage output, most notably guaranteeing a 2HKO on Ferrothorn and Defensive Buzzwole with Low Kick and Triple Axel respectably respectively.

(Please pay attention to your grammar, punctuation, spelling and sentence structures when writing - it is fine to make mistakes, but some are obvious enough that they should be addressed while proofreading)

Team Options
========

Since Choice Band Weavile is vulnerable to entry hazards, this makes Defog users excellent teammates. Common Defog users such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent partners and they can use U-turn to bring Weavile in safely, while Landorus-T can also check Heatran for Weavile as well. Future Sight support from Tapu Lele, Galarian Slowking, Slowbro, and Slowking make for excellent partners as well (you are referring to Future Sight support from the Pokemon here, something like 'Future Sight Support from...is greatly appreciated' would be grammatically accurate) since they can help Weavile break through common checks such as Toxapex, Tapu Fini, and Buzzwole. Slowbro and Slowking in particular can also pivot Weavile in off of their safe Teleports bring Weavile safely onto the field with Teleport and can also check Heatran and Urshifu-R (Physically defensive Slowbro does not really check Heatran while the same goes for specially defensive Slowking and Urshifu-R, so you could word it as 'Urshifu-R and Heatran respectively'). Physical Attackers such as Garchomp, Kartana, Melmetal, Rillaboom, and Urshifu-R are all excellent partners as they all boost the power of Beat Up and overwhelm checks such as Tapu Fini and Heatran (I think you are referring to the concept of having multiple threats overwhelm shared checks here, so mentioning Pokemon that actually check the attackers you mentioned as well as Weavile like Corviknight and Buzzwole would be better), Rillaboom in particular pairs excellently with Weavile, luring in Flying-types such as Zapdos and Tornadus-T while also softening up defensive cores with Knock Off, in turn, Rillaboom can. Rillaboom also threatens Urshifu-R and Tapu Fini for Weavile. Heatran is a superb partner as it can scare out some of Weavile's checks like Melmetal, Volcarona, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele. Other Steel-types such as Ferrothorn and Melmetal can also help check Clefable and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele for Weavile as well. (mention what those Steel-types do as well, e.g. Ferrothorn sets up spikes while Melmetal lures in Pokemon like Slowbro and Zapdos for Weavile to exploit) Garchomp is a great partner as it can force out common checks to Weavile such as Toxapex and Heatran, and in turn while Weavile can help Garchomp against threaten Slowbro and Landorus-T. Urshifu-R is another good partner for also pairs well with Weavile as well, appreciating the fact that it can take on force out Slowbro, Dragonite, and Zapdos, and in exchange while Urshifu-R can help it against offensively check Ferrothorn, (deleting Ferrothorn here because Urshifu fears Power Whip even though it can knock out Ferrothorn with Close Combat) Blaziken, and Melmetal as well as the aforementioned and Heatran.

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Slowpoke Fan done!

 

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Slowpoke Fan done!

QC 2/2 . GP Team this is ready for grammar checks.

 

[Tbolt]

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AC = add comma
AH = add hyphen
ASC = add semicolon
RP = remove period

GP 1/1

[SET]
name: Choice Band
move 1: Ice Shard
move 2: Triple Axel
move 3: Knock Off
move 4: Low Kick / Beat Up
item: Choice Band
ability: Pressure
nature: Jolly / Adamant
evs: 252 Atk / 4 SpD / 252 Spe

[SET COMMENTS]
Set Description
=========

Choice Band Weavile is a powerful wallbreaker that can punch holes in teams with its strong STAB moves and high Speed. Ice Shard is good at picking off faster foes such as Dragapult, (AC) as well as boosted Garchomp and Dragonite, and it can also outprioritize Rillaboom's Grassy Glide. Triple Axel is insanely strong when backed by Choice Band, 2HKOing Clefable, (AC) as well as 2HKOing Defensive defensive Buzzwole after Stealth Rock. Knock Off lets Weavile remove items and from its checks earlier on early-game such as Rocky Helmet from Buzzwole, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Corviknight as well as or Leftovers from Melmetal and Tapu Fini. Low Kick allows Weavile to hit Steel types Steel-types like Ferrothorn, Melmetal, and Heatran for super-effective super effective damage. Another option is Beat Up, which, (AC) when paired with strong physical attackers, (AC) is an immensely strong, no-contact stab STAB move that allows it to muscle through many targets early-game (AH) such as Toxapex and Corviknight. A Jolly nature is used to allow Weavile to be as fast as possible, letting it outspeed Tornadus-T and speed Speed tie Modest Dragapult. However, an Adamant nature can be used to maximize its damage output, most notably guaranteeing a 2HKO on Ferrothorn and Defensive defensive Buzzwole with Low Kick and Triple Axel, (AC) respectively.

Team Options
========

Since Choice Band Weavile is vulnerable to entry hazards, this makes Defog users such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent teammates. Common Defog users such as Corviknight, Tornadus-T, and Landorus-T make excellent partners and they All of these can also use U-turn to bring Weavile in safely, while with Landorus-T can also able to check Heatran for Weavile. Future Sight support from Tapu Lele, Galarian Slowking, Slowbro, and Slowking is are greatly appreciated, (AC) since they can help Weavile break through common checks such as Toxapex, Tapu Fini, and Buzzwole. Slowbro and Slowking in particular can bring Weavile safely onto the field with Teleport and can also check Urshifu-R and Heatran, (AC) respectively. Physical Attackers attackers such as Garchomp, Kartana, Melmetal, Rillaboom, and Urshifu-R are all excellent partners, (AC) as they all boost the power of Beat Up and overwhelm checks such as Buzzwole and Corviknight,. (RC, AP) Rillaboom in particular pairs excellently well with Weavile, luring in Flying-types such as Zapdos and Tornadus-T while also softening defensive cores with Knock Off;. (ASC, RP) Rillaboom it also threatens Urshifu-R and Tapu Fini for Weavile. Heatran is a superb partner, (AC) as it can scare out some of Weavile's checks like Melmetal, Volcarona, Clefable, Ferrothorn, and Choice Scarf Tapu Lele. Other Steel types Steel-types such as Ferrothorn and Melmetal can also help check Clefable and Tapu Lele for Weavile as well ("Also" and "as well" are redundant.). Ferrothorn can also set up Spikes for Weavile to take advantage of, (AC) while Melmetal can lure in Pokemon like Slowbro and Zapdos for Weavile to exploit. Garchomp is a great partner, (AC) as it can force out common checks to Weavile such as Toxapex and Heatran, while Weavile can help Garchomp threaten by threatening Slowbro and Landorus-T. Urshifu-R also pairs well with Weavile, appreciating the fact that it Weavile can force out Slowbro, Dragonite, and Zapdos, while Urshifu-R can offensively check Blaziken, Melmetal, and Heatran.

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implemented!

 

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GP Team done

silly tbolt, you got it backwards