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Slaking has a mistake in it:

Pokemon such as, but not limited to, Suicune, Snorlax, Suicune, and Celebi take over 50% damage from it.
Suicune is there twice, it's at the start of the second paragraph in Set Comments.

My bad :p
 
Ambipom's analysis page, Pure Baton Pass set: http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/ambipom

Maximum Speed is mainly used in case Ambipom is unable to pull off an Agility. This depends on the situation; if Ambipom can only pass one boost, then, for example, a 612 Speed Moltres is not much harder to stop than one with 306 Speed if the enemy has Milotic or Chansey, while the same cannot be said about a 698 SpA Moltres.
Feels rather awkward. I'd suggest "... then a 612 Speed Moltres for example is not ..."

Powerful Fighting STAB attacks can force Ambipom to pass before he gathers its boosts, which dramatically weakens the sweeper.
"its" should be "his".
 
I'm not sure how important this is, as it is Gen 4, but on the Mareep analysis, it says to use 78 SpD EVs for some reason, when 76 is the actual number that should be used.
 
I'm not sure how important this is, as it is Gen 4, but on the Mareep analysis, it says to use 78 SpD EVs for some reason, when 76 is the actual number that should be used.
 
Smog issue #15: http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue15/featured_pokemon_uber

The advent of the fifth generation certainly kept things much the same: Palkia still had two of the best STABs in the game, Palkia was still a beast under rain and sun, and Palkia could still sweep given a variety of conditions.
Should be present tense: Palkia still HAS two of the best STABs in the game, Palkia IS still a beast under rain and sun, and Palkia CAN still sweep given a variety of conditions.
 

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I found my old typo sheet from when I decided I'd read every DPP Pokemon on-site for errors, and it inspired me to start again.

From Hariyama - Hypno, I've found:

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Hariyama

In the Other Options section, as well as in the OU Counters section, ThunderPunch is misspelled as "Thunderpunch".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Haunter

In the Sub + 3 Attacks set, near the bottom of the last paragraph, it says:

Fighting and Ground-type attacks
"Fighting" should be "Fighting-".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Hitmonchan

-- The last sentence of the first paragraph of the Choice Scarf set is awkwardly worded. It says:

Ice Punch hits Venusaur and Altaria harder than Close Combat and Stone Edge and ThunderPunch will damage Water-types such as Milotic and Slowbro.
This eliminates the confusing "and" between Stone Edge and ThunderPunch:

Ice Punch hits Venusaur and Altaria harder than Close Combat and Stone Edge, while ThunderPunch damages Water-types such as Slowbro and Milotic.
-- In the last sentence of the first paragraph of the Agility set, "ThunderPunch" is misspelled as "Thunderpunch".

-- In the Checks and Counters section, last paragraph, it says:

...to switch to the necessary Pokemon that resists it.This is especially true for...
There should be a space after the period.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Hitmonlee

-- In the Choice Band set, second paragraph, it says:

...Ghost-types switching in for free Mismagius is OHKOed by...
Between "free" and "Mismagius", a period is missing that divides the two sentences.

-- In the last paragraph of the same set, it says:

...as they can absorb Will-o-Wisp and are benefitted by Hitmonlee's...
"by" should be added where I bolded it.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Hitmontop

In the second paragraph of the Rapid Spin set, there is a dash that should be an em-dash.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Ho-Oh

-- In the overview, it says:

...meaning the Ho-Oh is now a top-tier threat...
"the" should be "that".

-- In the Physical Attacker set, third paragraph, it says:

Ho-Oh can do severe damage to opponent who threaten it...
"opponent" should be plural.

-- In the fifth paragraph of the same set, it says:

...as Darkrai is a major threats to the...
"threats" should not be plural.

-- In the last sentence of the last paragraph of the Toxic Stall set, it says:

Latias can deal with Rest+ Sleep Talk Kyogre easily, as it resists Kyogre's Water-type STAB, can Recover off the damage, and then take out Kyogre with Grass Knot or Thunder.
Latias so far only can deal with Kyogre, so to describe what she will do, "can" and "then" should be added where I've bolded them.

-- In the Checks and Counters section, first paragraph, it says:

...are at worst 2HKOed by Ho-Oh Life Orb Brave Bird...
There should be an 's after Ho-Oh, since it's Ho-Oh's LO Brave Bird.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Houndoom

In the Nasty Plot set (not the Mixed NP set), fourth paragraph, it says:

Feraligatr, especially bulky variants, have...
"have" should be "has". This one I am less sure of, since I'm not certain whether subject-verb agreement relies on the subject ("Feraligatr", making it "has") or it's modifier ("especially bulky variants", making it "have"). I believe it's the first one, but correct me if I'm wrong.

That's all I have for now.
 

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In Houndoom the word Feraligatr implies multiple Feraligatr, some of which are bulky variants, so 'have' is correct. Aside from this, every other change has been made.
Excellent work!
 

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I've proofread all the Pokemon from I - J. This brings my total count up to 125 Pokemon proofread.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/illumise

-- In the Checks and Counters section, it says:

Altaria is can switch in,...
"is" should be removed.

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/infernape

-- In the Ubers Physically-Based Mixed Attacker set, first sentence of the third paragraph, it says:

This set has massive problems with Giratina, Giratina-O, Latias, and Latios. All three resist...
Four Pokemon are listed here, but the article says three.

-- In the same set, same paragraph, it says:

Choice Scarf Dialga is an excellent answer to Giratina, Giratina-O, Rayquaza, Latios, Latias, and Mewtwo, although Dialga must watch out for potential Aura Spheres that might be aimed at Infernape), as it outspeeds and OHKOes all of them with Draco Meteor.
There is a lone parenthesis here that needs to be paired up.

Choice Scarf Dialga is an excellent answer to Giratina, Giratina-O, Rayquaza, Latios, Latias, and Mewtwo (although Dialga must watch out for potential Aura Spheres that might be aimed at Infernape), as it outspeeds and OHKOes all of them with Draco Meteor.
This revision fixes the problem.

-- In the OU Checks and Counters section, fifth paragraph, it says:

Aerodactyl is not weak to any of Infernape's common attacks, and it has enough defenses to survive one good hit as it comes in, and then outspeeds, and OHKO Infernape with 130 base Speed and Earthquake.
This sentence is worded awkwardly. This revision sounds a bit better:

Aerodactyl is not weak to any of Infernape's common attacks, and it has enough defenses to survive one good hit as it comes in, outspeeds, and OHKOes Infernape with Earthquake.
http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Jirachi

-- In the Choice Specs set, last sentence of the last paragraph, it says:

Roar Vaporeon gets a special mention due to its ability to abuse entry hazards, as well as the ability to hit a random poke on the opponent's team hard with Doom Desire.
"poke" should be replaced with "Pokemon".

-- In the Dual Screens set, first paragraph, it says:

Thanks to Light Clay boosting the length of both Reflect and Light Screen to 8 turns instead of 5, your setup and attempted sweep, should be much easier to accomplish.
The comma between "sweep" and "should" is extraneous and breaks up the flow of the sentence.

-- In the same set, last sentence of the last paragraph, that sentence is missing a period at the end.

-- In the Uber Scarf set, third paragraph, it says:

The EVs are relatively simple; maximizing Attack allows Jirachi to deal as much damage as possible—this is particularly important as its offensive prowess is rather lackluster; and maximum Speed allows Jirachi to speed tie with Dragon Dance Salamence.
This em dash series is incomplete.

The EVs are relatively simple; maximizing Attack allows Jirachi to deal as much damage as possible—this is particularly important as its offensive prowess is rather lackluster—and maximum Speed allows Jirachi to speed tie with Dragon Dance Salamence.
I believe that this is what it should be. This is one of those things I'm unsure of, but that I'm reporting anyway.

-- In the Uber Substitute + Thunder Wave set, second sentence, it says:

Its excellent typing allows it to take on many special threats such as Latias, Latios, Giratina-O, Mewtwo and, Darkrai.
"on" should be added where I bolded it, while the part of the comma series that I've underlined needs fixing.

-- In the same set at the bottom of the first paragraph, it reads "Iron head". "head" needs to be capitalized.

-- In the OU Checks and Counters section, second paragraph, it says:

Without Hidden Power Ground or Fighting, Magnezone can switch in, resisting the entire moveset, and then trap and kill Jirachi at its leisure.
"resisting" should be "resist".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/Jolteon

-- In the Choice Specs set, last paragraph, it says:

A Tyranitar of your own can be beneficial with his ability Pursuit the likes of Blissey and Celebi...
There is a "to" missing that should go before "Pursuit".

-- In the Checks and Counters section, last paragraph, the hyphens there should be changed to em dashes.

That's all I have for now.
 
I'm fixing all of these, will edit when done.

EDIT: Done. Fixed everything except the "resisting" to "resist" suggestion because I don't agree with it.

Thanks for the hard work!
 

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I've read all the Pokemon articles that began with the letter K. Here's what I've found:

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/kabutops

-- In the last sentence of the third paragraph of the Swords Dance set, it says:

while still enabling itto beat Choice Scarf Rotom
There should be a space separating "it" and "to".

-- In the Lead set, fifth paragraph, it says:

Kabutops can only 4HKO through Leftovers, while Omastar can set up Spikes and Stealth Rock or2HKO Kabutops with Surf.
"or" and "2HKO" should be separated by a space.

-- In the Uber Choice Band set, last sentence of the second paragraph, it says:

Aqua Jet is an option, to pick of weakened Pokémon, but, generally speaking, you'll be faster than your opponent thanks to Swift Swim.
"of" should be "off".

-- In the last paragraph of the same set, it says:

Giratina in particular can present a problem, as it resists you main form of attack...
"you" should be "your".

http://www.smogon.com/dp/pokemon/kingdra

-- In the first sentence of the third paragraph of the Substitute + Dragon Dance set, it says:

Max Speed EV investment is used to guarantee that Kingdra outspeed neutral-natured base 80 Speed Pokemon and Gyarados.
"outspeed" should be "outspeeds".

-- In the same set, last paragraph, it says:

Scizor and Tyranitar can trap Starmie by using Pursuit totake it out.
There should be a space between "to" and "take".

-- In the Rain Dance Mized Attacker set, third paragraph, it says:

Azelf, Bronzong, Jirachi, and Swampert are the best options on Rain Dance teams as they all can all provide both Rain Dance and Stealth Rock.
"all" is there one too many times. Either one can be removed, but I personally think removing the second "all" would make the sentence sound better.

-- In the Rain Dance + Dragon Dance set, last sentence of the first paragraph, it says:

Unlike the Dragon Dance, Kingdra can also afford to invest in his Hit Points; thus improving Kingdra's survivability and increasing the chance of him getting the opportunity to set up Dragon Dance.
"set" should be added after "Dragon Dance" to make sure it refers to the Dragon Dance set. In addition, the semicolon is used incorrectly, and should be a regular comma instead.

-- In the Mono-Attacker set, first sentence of the fifth paragraph, it says:

This set benefits from partners who can switch in on the Steel-type Pokemonwhom Kingdra has trouble against...
There should be a space between "Pokemon" and "whom".

-- In the last sentence of the Other Options section for OU, it says:

Timid, 32 HP / 252 SpA / 224 Spe can even be used for surprise factor outside of rain, as well as to outspeed almost all opposing Kingdra and +2 Jolly Gyarados in the rain.
"to" should be added where I bolded it.

That's all I have for now.
 
Smog issue #13: http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue13/metagame_ou

Burunkeru synergizes well with Nattorei, covering each other's weaknesses perfectly. Burunkeru also spinblocks, though it has some troubles with most Rapid Spinners. Burunkeru is still a good bulky Water, and can prove to be a major pain in the neck at times, with its great special bulk. Between Nattorei and Burunkeru, the only types that aren't resisted are Flying (which is exceedingly rare anyway) and Ground(which is very common, but is handled well by other Pokemon).
Suggesting:

1) trouble [no 's']
2) times [no comma]
3) Ground (which) [insert space]
 
Smog issue #13: http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue13/bw_threatlist

Although Shaymin-S didn't gain much from the transition to BW (except for the move Troll), it is still capable of plowing through any unprepared team, courtesy of its awe-inspiring offensive traits. The first and plausibly the most important of these "traits" would be Shaymin-S's blistering base 127 Speed stat which alone can allow it to effectively play the role of a revenge killer. Secondly, its great Special Attack stat, which coupled up with Seed Flare is capable of tearing through even the likes of Blissey; to add to its offensive prowess, Shaymin-S has a spectacular ability, Serene Grace, which allows the Gratitude Pokemon to further abuse its awesome STAB in the form of Seed Flare, which after the boost from Serene Grace has a stunning 80% chance to lower the opponent's Special Defense by two stages. Straying away from Seed Flare, we find Shaymin-S having a couple of other moves that also benefit greatly from Serene Grace and an immense base 120 Special Attack stat; Air Slash would be the foremost of Shaymin-S's other options as it provides a reliable form of secondary STAB while also posing as a great annoyance as after Serene Grace it has a 60% chance to flinch the opponent. It seems as though generation 5 will be a stroll in the park for Shaymin-S.
Awkward sentence ...

Suggesting "Air Slash would be the foremost of Shaymin-S's other options as a secondary STAB while also having a 60% chance to flinch the opponent with Serene Grace".
 
Smog issue #13: http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue13/bw_threatlist

Rising all the way into number one in our countdown is none other than the infamous Ditto! In previous generations the pink blob had always been disregarded due to its lackluster base stats, and its movepool consisting of only one move, Transform, which had its merits, although it wasn't commonly used due to the fact that it needed to be "set up." Back in those days Ditto was basically a second Unown from a competitive battler's perspective. However, generation 5 has brought Ditto a way to rise into the higher tiers: the ability, Eccentric. Eccentric will allow Ditto to transform into the opposing Pokemon upon switching in and copy all stats of the opponent's Pokemon as of the turn Ditto switches in. Slap a Choice Scarf onto Ditto and you've got one of the (if not the) best revenge killers in the game, able to revenge kill almost any problematic foe. The world of competitive battling in generation 5 is sure to look awfully sunny for the pink blob, Ditto.
Overly long sentence maybe ... ?

Suggesting "In previous generations the pink blob had always been disregarded due to its lackluster base stats, and its movepool consisting of only one move, Transform. Transform had its merits, but it wasn't commonly used due to the fact that it needed to be "set up".

The last "set up" is a definite punctuation fault in the original.
 
Smog issue #13: http://www.smogon.com/smog/issue13/featured_pokemon_uber

Not much can be said about Zekrom's history because it is a new Pokemon. Along with Reshiram, it was among the first of the 5th Generation Pokemon revealed, after Zoroark. Soon after, it was rumored (and eventually confirmed), that both Reshiram and Zekrom are Dragon-type Pokemon. On May 31st, 2010, two weeks prior to the official revelation of its type, Shoko-tan mentioned on her blog on how she loved Electric-type Pokemon and wanted to get Zekrom as a result. The thought of a Dragon/Electric Pokemon excited people due to the coverage granted by its STABs. The effectiveness of the combination was most prominently displayed by Latias and Latios in the 4th Generation, where they could pummel through a majority of the Uber metagame with Dragon Pulse and Thunder. And of course, who wasn't excited for an Uber Pokemon that could very likely OHKO Kyogre?
Should be "by".
 

Aeron Ee1

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fixed all of banedon's stuff, except the last one since i think that's okay, and did some general proofreading here and there too..
 
Considering that small objectives changes from past gen. links to here...
I think is low priority now but in the last paragraph of manectric analysis on-site (checks and counters) there is a small typo in Alakazam name.
 

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